Jack And Primo Rock!

Michel Fortin · **Jack And Primo Rock! -** 08-07-2006, 05:40 PM

Jack Bastide (with the help of Stephen Davies) have done it again! The copy for my new software, Power Words Generator, has produced awesome results.

Initial email to a small portion of my list generated 740 clicks, 410 optins and 50 sales.

That's...

55.4% optin rate (which is awesome!).
Direct closing rate of 12.2% (from optins to close).

But more importantly...

50 sales to 740 visitors is a visitor-based (and more important) closing rate of 6.8% (from unique visitors to close).

That's cool!

Here's the email if you want to check out Jack (and Stephen's) copy...

Quote:

By now you've probably heard the news.

I'm marrying my Soul Mate in just a little over a week and we're so excited we can hardly contain ourselves.

In the spirit of things...

... And because I have every intention of being VERY difficult to reach for a couple of weeks...

I'm offering a few entrepreneurs, like yourself, a 'sneak preview' of my long anticipated copywriting software.

This power tool is unlike any sales letter or ad copy resource you've seen before.

It can automatically turn your own words into powerful, hypnotic, response driving sales copy.

It'll be like having a highly sought after, multi-million dollar copywriter crank out sizzling sales and ad copy whenever you want -- without having to pay a mint.

I've put together a video for you so you'll better understand what I mean.

In addition to getting a jump on your competition by seeing this before everyone else I'm going to offer an 'early bird' discount.

Why am I doing this?

Since I won't be available for a while on my blog and the forums I want to leave behind something that'll help with writing copy.
There's still a kink in the software we want to work out. The software is a little hyperactive right now and is even turning words like 'but', 'the', 'and', etc into power copy.

It's nothing major and doesn't really justify a discount. You'll just have to ignore the smaller words for a week or so 'til we get it fixed.

But if you're willing to deal with that I'll let you pick up one of the first copies of this blockbuster at a reduced price. You'll get all upgrades at no charge so its a great offer.

To see our video about this ground breaking software and my 'early bird' discount follow the link below.

But don't wait... This offer's only good for the next few days because I don't have much time left before my wedding and honeymoon.

Go to the link below now.

Power Words Generator Early Bird Discount

abdellah · 08-07-2006, 06:01 PM

Congratulation for both Jaky and Primo.

Primo you did it my friend I am realy happy for that.

but what I found realy interesting is to combine these 2 talented person.

I enjoyed reading the copy.

Stephen Davies · 08:07 PM

Excellent numbers!

Way to Go Jack!

Michel,
If you don't mind, I would like to show how much of a difference Jack made in the original copy so "he" gets all the credit!

If I remember correctly, this was my "second" attempt of writing adcopy of any kind, so I still hadn't quite "gotten it" at this point.

Here is a copy of the original

Please keep the laughter down to a low hush!

~~ and yeah, ignore the made up testimonials (I didn't have any to go by).

As I have had the opportunity to use the software, I will say that it Rocks!

Since Jack mentioned his name in the copy, major credit should also go to John Tanner -- the guy working behind the scenes

BTW - To see the actual sales page Jack wrote, you'll need to sign up on the squeeze page ~~~ it's well worth it, Enjoy!

Jack Bastide · **It was a pleasure ... -** 08-07-2006, 07:13 PM

Thanks for the Opportunity Michel!

It's easy to have great results when you have a excellent base
of copy to work with. I used much of Stephens copy and bullets
and added my little "Mr F" twist to it

Also the fact that John and Michel have put together an
incredible product that makes a lot of sense makes it all
that much easier

Jack

P.S. I have an idea for a Movie script ... Mr "F" meets the Pirate
and the Magician ... coming soon to a theater near you

Montello Marketing · 08-07-2006, 09:18 PM

Congrats to both of you.

Writing for Michel is something that makes me jealous. Anything that makes me jealous has to be a great accomplishment!

Stephen Davies · 09:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by tvwriterguy

Congrats to both of you.

Writing for Michel is something that makes me jealous. Anything that makes me jealous has to be a great accomplishment!

Well Vin, you were lucky enough to have done some work with Matt Marshall, which is nothing to sneeze at either!

I'll agree with Jack that I too appreciate the opportunity to have done this for such a classy guy!

Montello Marketing · 08-07-2006, 10:01 PM

But I sneeze at Matt all the time... Mike too!

Actually I'm still grateful for the apprentice contest and am still working closely with those two. I'm still owned (happily) for almost 2 more months. (actually not sure... It may be over 2)

Andy Catsimanes · 11:14 PM

Veni, vidi, ebas.

(I came, I saw, I bought)

A.

jbird5150 · 08-08-2006, 12:33 AM

I read that copy earlier today...well done gentlemen.

What a great idea Michel. If there was one "I wish I had THIS when I was writing a sales letter" tool I've ever yearned for, it was this one.

Looking forward to giving it a whirl...

Michel Fortin · 08-08-2006, 10:36 AM

More numbers.

As of midnight last night:

882 clicks
561 optins
75 sales

Wow.

That's...

63.6% optin rate
13.4% closing rate to optins
8.5% closing rate to unique visitors