Hi,
I would appreciate it if you guys could help me out with my site.

Here's the url - Get Your Ex Back|How to get your ex back
You will find links to other articles on this page. every article is supposed to presell.
I have one goal for this site.
Reader comes to page ---> Reads Presell article ---> buys affiliate product.

It seems that my articles are not working as I have sent a lot of visitors to the affiliate page but still haven't got any sales.

What do you think is wrong.

One guy told me that my articles lack in empathy and are a bit cold.
More suggestions and advice are welcome.

bye,
faraz

It seems like a good product and pitch. Lacking empathy is not the letter's problem. It's main problem is it's chatty and has a lot of grammar errors (e.g. "...you had when love your love was new..."). I could go for hours with details but basically, it needs to have a couple more passes made and removing words and sentences that don't compel the reader to want to know more.

Obviously you spent a lot of time and effort on the video but I think it has a couple of issues that could turn people off. (1) you're not dressed the part. Nicer clothes in a nicer setting like maybe outside. (2) speak more naturally. your eyes are all over the place, too many "uhhs and umms" and finally (3) same thing with the copy, cut out the chatty words that don't help convey your message.

Less chat, more enticement and "it's not your fault" and fix the grammar and your letter could be awesome. GL

Hi,
I think that there was a misunderstanding.
You are talking about the affiliate sales page while I want you to critique the articles in the site -- Get Your Ex Back|How to get your ex back

The video and the person you are talking about is the author of the product.
I am am affiliate and my site is the one I mentioned above.

Hope this clears it up.
bye,
faraz

Oops, my mistake. Might want to pass on the thoughts to the author anyhow. So the links are at the bottom?

Yes, the links are at the bottom. And tell me about the index page too.
I have written articles which are supposed to presell the product. It seems that the articles are not doing a good job, as I am not getting any sales.

Maybe you could tell me how to improve on it and increase their desire for the product?

bye,
faraz

P.S. Dont want to tell the author about these mistakes as it might just irritate him because he didnt ask me for any critiques and he is a very good marketer. Dont want to piss him off?

Okay, it didn't take very long to go through it. Here's the blunt honest truth.

1. Your articles are unnecessary. A big link that says, "Save Your Relationship", "Get Your Ex Back" or the more direct "Get Laid" would probably do it. If someone has come to your page they probably don't need much enticement to read a sales letter.

2. The articles, if you really really want to keep them, are not good. They're not personal meaning the reader can't feel that what you're telling them relates to them. Telling a story is great. You have to pull the reader into the story so they feel you're talking about them.

They also have grammar problems (e.g. If you really want them back dont every do any of these things. should at least be If you really want them back don't do any of these things...ever.

Also, (e.g. "Okay, I wont do all this?" should probably be "Okay, I won't do all those things." -- it's not a question).

There's more.

3. Do you know how many click-thrus you're getting?

My guess is a respectable percentage because the most prominent links go to the sales letter. Problem is that once they get to the sales letter, they're gone because of my first post.

His letter is premature. It's not finished and has a really poorly thought out format. It's not compelling, the video is painful to watch and in the end people aren't ordering.

So, it's not your articles. It's the sales letter. It's wrong on so many levels I'm surprised it converts at all. Maybe you should rewrite his letter and create your own order page with his permission. I think positioned correctly in the market, probably college age kids, that product could do decently with the right copy.

I wish you the best.

Aah, So maybe that's the problem. And yes, you are right. I am getting a lot of clickthroughs.
Maybe I should test this with a different affiliate product. I will change the links to a different product and test it out.
In the meantime, could you give me some tips on how to make my articles more personal and connect more to the reader.

I want the articles to be there, as they help me with the search engines. I am working at improving my preselling skills, and would like it if you give some tips on that.

bye,
faraz