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why? everyone is reading but no one replies.


please let me know how you feel 'bout this copy!

Jacobs

I think it is uncredibly.
200 % - people say "ok, it can be, maybe I did something wrong, I will try it"
1000 % - people say "it isn´t possible, so many..."

BTW: Maybe some concrete details improve the copy (read: How to Supercharge Your Content With Concrete Details | Copyblogger).

yicob,

C'mon... you've been around this place for a little while... You have to know it's not very good.

No offense. You tried and trying is something good. But The overuse of color... the use of all capped headlines... the english that isn't even close to english.

I'm not making fun of you, but really (and I've said this before) if you want to write copy and you don't speak and write english fluently... somehow find a niche in your language.

In addition to what the others said, I think the headline needs work. What's in it for me (your prospect). I don't care that someone else got 1000%, how do I get 1000%?

Color is bad. Typically stick to one, maybe 2 colors.

You mention positive testimonials, what are they? I don't believe that you have them unless you show me.

You might also do some math. 1000%? Of what?

You could say the copy increased sales or conversions by 1000%. But to say that you sold 1000% makes it sound like more people than those who read the copy bought something. I sent a letter to 10 people, and I made 100 sales. Way too unbelievable.