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Slap me: My first ever copy!

This is my first ever copy written.
It's for my first product that I will release in a week,

Please review it, laugh if you want - but most important - give me your feedback and suggestions. Thank you!

The address is:
dotcom hunter






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Romualdas Maciulis

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Default Re: Slap me: My first ever copy! - 11-26-2007, 08:02 AM

Here's the copy, if you're lazy to visit the page:

“Discover The Secrets Of How To Still Find Great Domain Names At Bargain Prices...”

Watch the dotcom hunter video report and ...
  • Learn new and better ways to come up with original domain name ideas
  • Find new domain names by learning a simple yet powerful method of search and creativity
  • Make profit by finding domain names and reselling them
Interested? Here's what you will get...
  • A 2-part video recording of an actual domain name search with step-by-step instructions, comments and techniques you can use over and over again
  • Pre-made word lists to help you get started quickly with your domain-hunting
  • Online resources to boost your creativity for domain name search
You might think "All good domain names are gone..."

Not quite! All obvious domain names are gone (and, in fact, not all actually - did you personally check them all?)
The obvious ones are gone, but there's still great domain names that aren't registered (the not-so-obvious ones)

You might even think "I know how to find great domain names myself!.."

Great!
Watch the video report. If your ideas are not in it - let's add them to the next revision!
And even still you can pickup new ideas to add to your existing ones.


There is no risk to you


You'll know in 7-minutes or so if you're satisfied with the video report... but I will make it easier for you to order today:

I am giving you a 100% no-questions-asked guarantee. You can ask for a refund for a period of 7 months from the date of your purchase. That's right - if you're not entirely satisfied, you'll get a full refund straight-away.


Yes! I want to watch the dotcom hunter video report right now. $57(striked) $47(striked) $17 <Order now>


Wishing you the best domain-hunting success,

Romualdas Maciulis
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©2007 Romualdas Maciulis, All Rights Reserved. "Dotcom Hunter" and "Romualdas Maciulis" are trademarks used by Romualdas Maciulis.
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Default Re: Slap me: My first ever copy! - 11-26-2007, 10:13 PM

Hmmm...let's start with your target.

I'm assuming you're after the folks who have HEARD that there's money in the domain name business, have also heard that the best names are already registered (let's be honest...they are), but are still somewhat interested in buying and reselling domains.

Answer their first objective in the headline -

Quote:
Yes - You Can Still Make Big Money In the Domain Name Industry
With a little creative thinking and bargain hunting, you can still turn thousands of dollars in a single domain name sale.
Now lead into something more substantial - some success stories.

In this case, they don't actually have to be about your video. Just something to prove that the domain business is still alive. Hell, check out the last TRAFFIC auction report. I think computers.com went for 2.something million.

Once you point out some of the big sales, then talk about some of the ones that are more likely to work for beginners. I mean the $500-$1500 ones.

Now that you got their attention, let them see that you're not just trying to make outrageous claims and have made some realistic quotes, introduce your video.

Also -
  • Don't voice the reader's objections...just answer them.
  • Don't act as if you need the reader's input to make the product better.
  • And for heaven's sake, get a designer!


I've got it, You need it, I'm selling it at:
http://copyforsale.com - The Copywriter Come True
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