Before & After...

Before KGB brute force was viable propaganda.

Will this opt-in page work=> Caught on Tape

After KGB, we see a teddy bear named Binky.

Unearthing a rare glimpse at PROPAGANDA NEVER BEFORE SEEN online, Brian T. Edmondson takes us on a mind-altering time-warp to the Pre-KGB era...

Before KGB
Pre Kinder Gentler Ben => Caught on Tape

HOW'S THAT working?

Critique us please.

Warmly and sincerely,

B&B

Okay, so the question is whether this opt-in page works.

It intrigued me. Yes.

The "Caught on tape" headline is catchy regardless of whether you know the name Ben Mack (more so if you do). Maybe you want to label Ben (with his name in the same sort of cartoon balloon you use at the end) at the beginning of the video.

Your subhead, "When Ben Mack attacks..." begins a statement that promises some punch but never delivers. You leave me hanging there--I have no idea how to complete that punchline and I want to know how the rest of it goes. After the video link box, finish that same sentence in seven syllables like the haiku master I know you are ("...duh duh duh DUH DUH duh duh"). Start with the ellipses and format the type same as the "When Ben..." subhead above.

Then I'd drop the red rules quotation and the business about the Big Seminar. Go straight to the head "Playing with a completely different set of rules" and put it in red.

I think it would also help to make that verb "playing" more active, though I can't see immediately how best to do that. "Play the game by new rules," "Play to win with a new set of rules," something like that.

MUST get back to work NOW. But you made me bookmark your site directly to my main bookmark bar. I'll definitely be going back to it to read more about these new rules of yours.

Okay, I see some more things I would change, along the same lines as above, in the interest of flow. But overall effective. I'm interested in your stuff, in general. Haven't brought the mental accuity to this board, in the past, to make it through all your posts. Didn't have to try hard with this page at all.

I opted in.

Now, tell me. Will there be a telecall, or is this a test?

doesn't do it for me... it looks just like the other 9,867,534 other internet marketing sites...

and maybe its me but i keep seeing the word branding used, but i find nothing of it visually on the site... nor in the theme or copy which isn't congruent.