Right now, this is what I'm sending out hoping to catch new clients for designing and writing their local paper ads. I was going to use the same thing for YP ads.

As you can see, I scan their ad, and paste it in the upper left hand corner.

I won't be doing the design work. The girl who designed this postcard will.

Don't hold back, give it to me straight.

That would catch my eye that's for sure. But rest of the copy seems a bit too loud...

I am sure you can tone the font down on the second headline and the rest of the copy text to ad more room to explain further about what you do in a less intrusive way.

But depending on what others say I would test this anyways and compare it to say a more concerned point of view.

Looks and sounds great to me. The only thing I might do is add something about visiting the website for a free report or some other freebie so you can build a list and market to them.

-- Rachel

Right now, just the address...any suggestions?

Another call to action, at least

Scratch that...I did put something else on it.

Not much to look at, but there is something more. I'm wondering if I should be more direct about how to take the next step. "Call me and we'll talk about bla, bla, bla."

"Don't waste another dime on inneffective advertising space."

That says it all - look at all that white space!

I'm debating between a post card or letter campaign myself. Plesae let us know how this turns out.

Ahhh, come on. Where are the blood thirsty critics? I may as well have asked my mom what she thought.