I approach these projects by getting to the
selling story and Unique Selling Proposition. And you are not there yet.
Rent the DVD for Risky Business, or watch episodic television. There are lots of problems which center around the stereo, parent and kids, and sanity. Drew Kaplan figured this out more than a decade ago...
Wireless Marriage Saver Now you can watch late-night TV while your spouse sleeps. Now you can work in peace while your spouse watches/listens to Talk Shows. And now you can listen to your stereo system and your computer completely cord-free!
It's a problem. I like to watch late-night movies in bed. But, my wife usually wants to go to sleep long before the movie is over.
For years, I kept the volume down low and struggled to hear the dialogue. I missed more than I heard.
And, my wife still complained. Plus I also like to flip channels. And, that just drives her crazy.
But she drives me crazy too. I hate listening to talk shows. And, we have a home office with 11 computers in it where I write/create the website and write these reviews.
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What's the feature list here? Notice there's no talk of millions of movies, "it's like a Walkman for your TV" or any of that.
Start with the problem. Saying it's like having an iPod is a crutch, designed to prop up weak appeal. What is going to to make customers choose your product, out of every other option they had ...including just buying an extra iPod or simply doing nothing?
You haven't answered the question, because you are still locked onto product features and not what benefits produce in the life of the purchaser. As long as you are talking about product, you're talking about features. As a copywriter your subject is human nature -- not products.