Hi, my name is Jag Senghera. I need you guys to help me and review my sales letter for my public speaking product. I appreciate your honest feedback.

Public Speaking Secrets

Jag, you need to inject more "believability" into your headline cuz a fella who from the very start is crippled by the fear of public speaking probably would have a hard time trying to visualize themselves "presenting like a professional public speaker" (it's an identity issue) even though the first few of words ("Instantly Eradicate Your Fear Of Public Speaking") might have sounded "aha-ha! this is a solution i want" between his hears

Moving on, the first 7 paragraphs is poorly written. Unadulterably confusing. Too many "IFs". It doesn't resonate with the reader.