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| Junior Expert   |  Window cleaner returns! (gulp) -
10-12-2006, 09:39 AM
When I posted my site for review of the copy a little while back, I got pretty slammed. It was all good stuff that I agreed with (almost  .I have done some small changes thoughout the site and would like to get some more thoughts on the copy. I keep re-reading Joe Sugarmans book (Advertising secrets of the written word) and I hope I start to "get it" in this century  until then...I am ready for your respected opinions. Paul- A Pane in the Glass |
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| Senior Member  | headline help -
10-12-2006, 10:18 AM
Hi,this is much better than the earlier version, but the headline didn't do much for me. Why not something like "Minnesota Pane Cleaner Gives Clients Cleaner Panes?" or even "Emergency Assistance for Dirty Windows Provided by Minnesota Company"....put a bit of drama into it.... Lack of ROMM has been known to result in declining sales... www.waldropmarketing.com The Results-Oriented Marketer Blog http://waldropmarketing.wordpress.com/ |
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