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Default Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-08-2004, 10:07 AM

Hi everyone,

First off, congrats to you Michel for the John Reese success. Nice to see us Canadian boys taking over the net

I have a short sales letter www.un-marketing.com/webinar.html that I already had someone do a rewrite "tweak" for me.

Thoughts? Since the seminar is tomorrow, it will be turned into the sales page for the recorded CD.

I look forward to your thoughts.

If you'd like to listen in, shoot me a message and I'll get you the call info.


Sincerely,

Scott Stratten, President
http://www.Un-Marketing.com
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Default Re: Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-08-2004, 05:51 PM

Scott -

I think you did a great job. It kept me reading and it was very well laid out.

I did notice one slight error. You had a 1-line sentence in a paragraph. It said, "So am I." I think (?) it should have read, "So I am."

I want to listen to your seminar - are you going to have transcripts available?

Don't even bother to look at my website. I'm having major problems with it right now and until I get my hosting company/my computer tech guy and myself straightened out - I'm essentially out of business for the time being.

Good luck!!
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Default Re: Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-08-2004, 06:49 PM

Shelle,

Interesting reverse psychology there! Because you said "don't" go and look at your website - I just HAD to - it was a compulsion!!

I'll have to remember that next time I want people to come to my website = tell them not to!!

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Default Re: Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-08-2004, 07:40 PM

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Shelle,

Interesting reverse psychology there! Because you said "don't" go and look at your website - I just HAD to - it was a compulsion!!

I'll have to remember that next time I want people to come to my website = tell them not to!!

Jane
LOL - Jane!!

I'm so sorry!! I really didn't mean for you to look at it! It's hideous! Hey, reverse psychology really works!! I use it on my two boys (ok, husband makes 3) all the time!

That IS a great marketing strategy though. I think if it's used in the right context you can really see some great results. Most of the reverse psychology copy that I read is too in-your-face for you to believe that you really don't want to go there. Know what I mean?

Thanks for visiting my awful website though. It's about to go blank as I'm going to have to rebuild it from scratch.

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Default Re: Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-08-2004, 11:47 PM

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I did notice one slight error. You had a 1-line sentence in a paragraph. It said, "So am I." I think (?) it should have read, "So I am."
D'OH!!! Thanks, all fixed now. I will have a transcript and recording, if that interests you. Heck, I'll even send you the CD version, as a thank-you for catching the error.


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Default Re: Very short letter to promote teleseminar (and CD) - 09-09-2004, 09:59 AM

No problem Scott! It was just a tiny error. No need to send me anything. I'm a sucker for catching errors on other people's copy. I never find it on my own. Go figure!

Thank you for the thoughtfulness though - but it is definitely not necessary. Unless you just want to -

Good luck!!
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