Will this sell?

maxjohan · **Will this sell? -** 09-09-2006, 05:58 PM

Hey, my team is ready with the copy now and I wonder what YOU think about this copy...

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Mr. Subtle · 09-09-2006, 06:20 PM

Holy SHEYET! Just when I thought internet marketing couldn't hit a new low, it broke through it like a hot knife slicing a stick of warm butter. DAYEM!

maxjohan · 09-09-2006, 06:21 PM

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Originally Posted by Mr. Subtle

Holy SHEYET! Just when I thought internet marketing couldn't hit a new low, it broke through it like a hot knife slicing a stick of warm butter. DAYEM!

What do you mean, can you be more specific?

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maxjohan

abdellah · 09-09-2006, 06:32 PM

My Friend;

the problem is in:

1)The design.
2)The copy.(headline, structure, testimonial)
3)The Language used.
4)the typography (font, underline hiegthlight, ..)

5)The strategy.

and a last word to the contact procedure (an email at hotmail), it isn't a go in action or an apeal to action, it is a ringing RED ALERT.

hope that help.

maxjohan · 09-09-2006, 06:36 PM

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Originally Posted by abdellah

My Friend;

the problem is in:

1)The design.
2)The copy.(headline, structure, testimonial)
3)The Language used.
4)the typography (font, underline hiegthlight, ..)

5)The strategy.

and a last word to the contact procedure (an email at hotmail), it isn't a go in action or an apeal to action, it is a ringing RED ALERT.

hope that help.

thanks a lot abdellah.. I know we are working on better design, underlining.. and I will change the copy if it doesnt work. simple as that.

Good idea with the email, I had actually forgot about that

Michel Fortin · 09-09-2006, 06:57 PM

I don't like anything that's particularly degrading to women.

I don't mind dating information products, of even "how to get laid" products. But "trophy" women? You got to be kidding me.

Quite frankly, it's nauseating.

abdellah · 07:07 PM

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Originally Posted by Michel Fortin

I don't like anything that's particularly degrading to women.

I don't mind dating information products, of even "how to get laid" products. But "trophy" women? You got to be kidding me.

Quite frankly, it's nauseating.

I agree 100% with you, and as MrSubtile said before, who made this?

who make this kind of attemt to copywriting happend?

what make me sad, is going in more outragious style (and sometime insulting), it begin with an arrogant style, then provocatif style, then NLP, then Picker...

some people have thier part in such emergent tendency of copywriting.

I have to be modest, Perhaps I am wrong.

who made this?

maxjohan · 09-09-2006, 07:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Michel Fortin

I don't like anything that's particularly degrading to women.

I don't mind dating information products, of even "how to get laid" products. But "trophy" women? You got to be kidding me.

Quite frankly, it's nauseating.

Sorry about that, not wanted to offend anyone here... I know this is not for everyone.

Still good you pointed that out.. then I will work on this approach even more
and make it become the "Rich Jerk" of dating LOL...

maxjohan · 09-09-2006, 07:12 PM

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Originally Posted by abdellah

I agree 100% with you, and as MrSubtile said before, who made this?

who make this kind of attemt to copywriting happend?

what make me sad, is going in more outragious style (and sometime insulting), it begin with an arrogant style, then provocatif style, then NLP, then Picker...

some people have thier part in such emergent tendency of copywriting.

I have to be modest, Perhaps I am wrong.

who made this?

Sorry, my panama writer made this.. I will give him an warning bro...

but anyway, there is much much worse degrading sites on the internet.

Nemesis · 09-09-2006, 08:09 PM

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Originally Posted by maxjohan

I can get work well done from the philpins for $5 per 800 words and I'm talking great work here.

You better move to the philpins to compete with this guys, they are
eager to work, and not like you guys living in a bubble trying
to be next Carlton or Halbert.

In the upcoming four years I plan to make a couple millions, I mean it's not too hard when you finally know how business really works ...

Quote:

Originally Posted by maxjohan

Sorry, my panama writer made this.. I will give him an warning bro...

but anyway, there is much much worse degrading sites on the internet.

Why should anyone help you?