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Default Help With New Headline - 09-06-2006, 08:24 PM

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Are you A Pet Person? If you're ready to turn your passion for pets into a full time income without huge upfront out of pocket costs and without gimmicky "products"...

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We've turned over every rock and reveal the easy-to-use secret tactics that will guarantee you fetch your own share of the $65 billion dollar pet industry...starting from scratch on a shoe-string budget!


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Default 09-06-2006, 09:01 PM

The headline you wrote was 36 words. Too, too long in my opinion.

Don't try to tell the whole story in your headline. Let the body of your copy do the heavy work.

This headline was written quickly, just off the top of my head.

Bear in mind, I haven't researched your market, so I have no idea if your figures are accurate. But $65 billion sounds awfully high to me.

But then again, a lot of people do have pets.

How To Grab Your Share Of The $65 Billion Dollar A Year Pet Industry!


It's not a sexy headline. But "How To" headlines are time-tested and proven to be very effective.

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Default Pick-A-Pet - 09-08-2006, 07:51 AM

NOBODY is a "Pet-Person"

Be specific.

There are big dogs
little dogs
cats
and Bearded-Lizard people.

Pick a group and market to them specifically.
(This will increase your sales, not reduce.)
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Default Copywriting headline... - 09-13-2006, 07:46 PM

Turn Your Passion For Pets
Into Real Cash Income

Forget spending a fortune upfront or selling gimmicky products...

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Andrew Cavanagh
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