I designed this for an upcoming seminar a colleague and I will be holding this September.. Any feedback/suggestions on this?:

http://www.daytradinguniversity.com/...ounseminar.jpg

(note the graphic is just the header, and will be embedded in a long copy page much like www.daytradingu.com/breakoutseminar.htm )


appreciate it!

ken

and on my latest webvideo:

http://www.daytradinguniversity.com/...ngjune2004.wmv ?

Ken,

This is what I found:

1) When the graphic is displayed in a smaller window, the text is distorted and I couldn't read it
2) I found the yellow text quite hard to read

An alternative is to do as much as possible in html (especially as you are using standard fonts), and lay it out in a table with the photos in the 1st and 3rd columns.

HTH,
Jane

Hi Ken,

I agree with Jane, I have excellent vision, but I had to croon towards my monitor to read the yellow text.

The 3rd and 4th bullets felt too general (as if you ran out of steam while writing this) considering that the other 2 were detailed.

Typo in the bottom sentence:

"Get an the best of both worlds..."

I guess it should it be:

"Get the best of both worlds..." ?

Just saw another typo in the yellow text:

"Learn See..."

Started with a thought, and changed it midstream? I bet you have so much on your plate, that you didn't edit carefully?

I know that one...

Regarding the actual copy, I'm not a trader, so I hesitate to make strong suggestions - is "Samurai Trading", a well known phrase amongst traders?

If not, I would rethink your headline - if it is well known, how could you make it more specific with more detail? It felt a little too general to me, not exculsive enough.

I realize that you probably have to be very careful about your wording for legal reasons, but it lacks a unique, attention grabbing edge.

I don't dare offer suggestions, because again, I am unfamiliar with the trade.

Tante buone cose (All the best),

Tim

Superb feedback, absolutely spot on, both ... appreciate it much, working on edits as we speak...

Adding some video testimonials to the salesletter, they should help as well.



ken