please let me know your point of view about this salesletter

abdellah

I know, i made many critics, i often be too affirmative.

So, I asked my self, have I the right to give my point of view, without making any sale letter, without any background?

So, here my first, unpublished sales letters, please fire it, give me all your critics, don't hesitate, I know that my English written isn't too correct

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Quote:

All the truth about copywriting
Those secret that copywriting guru, don't want you to know.

What would be your satisfaction, if some one is going to tell you all the copywriter's hidden secret, these entire secret kept a long time for the benefit of a few people that claim their selves to be the guru, and the masters of masters of the field.

Nothing but the truth

You will find here the inners secret of the most great copywriters, perhaps they are great, perhaps no, I will not make this affirmation in your place, you will be the one judge, the king of the citadel, the one to decide with a clear mind who merit to be read or not, the one who merit to be the guru, and the one who has to find an other job.

It is time for you to make the difference

Aren't you tiered from being duped all the time?

Aren't you tiered from being thrown away after giving out you last money?

Aren't you tiered from these self claimed masters of masters, and those emergent stars of copywriting?

Aren't you tiered from given too much for less return?

Aren't you tiered from being the eternal reader of those emergent stars who make their glory from your money?

It is enough; this is the time to break the rules

So, what is the solution?

Before going on, I have to confess some thing, I am not a copywriter, I am not a master of masters, I am just a simple reader like you, who share the same urgent need of clarity, my war cry is; stop abusing us.

Keep your money inside your pockets

Keep your money inside your pockets, this is a free friendly proposition, I am not going to charge you a penny, or a cent, because I know what mean a penny and what mean a cent too, because I know that you worked hard to earn this humble penny, so keep it in your pocket.

I will send you with your permission, the first chapter of the "Hidden copywriting secret", to you email box.

I will do that at one condition, please fell free to send me an email at: abdellah@gmail.com , with the following subject:ï¿½ hidden copywriting secretï¿½.

No Newsletters, No spam, just a respectful conversation between you and me, and no formatted email too, I hate all those copywriters tips.

Trust is my working slogan.

Respectfully yours A.Abdellah

Ps: this is a personal proposition just for you, if you want your friend to take profit from it please let me know.

all suggestion are welcome.
thanks.

Andy Catsimanes · 04-09-2006, 02:22 PM

Going for the "guru-saturated-anti-establishment backlash" market?

I like it.

skywriteing · 04-09-2006, 06:27 PM

The headline and first paragraph are critical to SUCK the reader in. Do at LEAST 30 more headlines and pick the best one. Then use some of the others for sub-heads.

abdellah · 04-10-2006, 06:24 AM

thank you for comment, and suggestions.

i hope to do better next time

Cartoonman · 04-11-2006, 08:49 AM

Hi Abdellah,

Keep writing.

The more you write the better you'll get.

I highly recommend you go to www.hardtofindads.com and find the ads by Gary Halbert and Brian Keith Voiles.

Every day write at least one of those out by hand.

Preferably 2 or 3 if you're serious about this game.

That will improve your writing and your understanding of the format of a successful sales letter.

Kindest regards,
Andrew Cavanagh

Freelance Online Copywriter