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Default 04-10-2006, 05:22 AM

It's actually 4 two week sessions spaced over 2 years and they have to do a lot of homework.
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Default 04-10-2006, 06:40 AM

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It's actually 4 two week sessions spaced over 2 years and they have to do a lot of homework.
Aah -- I missed that part in the copy...

much better -- more believeable!
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Default 04-10-2006, 07:25 AM

In the field most prospects expect and want the longer courses because if it's an approved course they can get their 500 hour yoga certification (also mentioned in the copy).

That's a pretty big hot button for them.
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Default 04-10-2006, 07:29 AM

If we catch up in Austin Stephen it will almost certainly while I'm spending another two weeks with the American Viniyoga Teacher Training group.

June 12-27th at the Crossings.

I could introduce you to Gary - as long as you don't try to steal his chewing gum!!

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Default 04-16-2006, 10:29 AM

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If we catch up in Austin Stephen it will almost certainly while I'm spending another two weeks with the American Viniyoga Teacher Training group.

June 12-27th at the Crossings.

I could introduce you to Gary - as long as you don't try to steal his chewing gum!!

Kindest regards,
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I'll be going out of town in June (probably Atlanta), but only for around 4 days. I will certainly try and schedule a trip to Austin -- Perhaps I could buy you lunch.

Heck of a lot cheaper than meeting you at a seminar.
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Default 2 x 4 x 2 - 04-16-2006, 12:39 PM

Reading through it again, the format is not clear at all. 2 weeks 8 weeks 2 years....none of that is clear. I think everyone will want to know the format.

It's said that P.S. 's are critical. Yours has none. Doesn't bother me though.
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Default 04-16-2006, 07:52 PM

The copy has two PS.s



In this niche they know the course is longer than 2 weeks especially since in the copy we mention the 500 hour certification (a big hot button).

The objective is to get people to call.

Interesting feedback. Thank you.

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