The only thing you need to critique - Page 2

Stephen Davies · 04-07-2006, 02:55 PM

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Originally Posted by jaykay

Hi Terry,

First of all, when you're testing you should only test 1 change at a time. You can't insert a graphic and then make changes changes to the copy (whether in length or actual copy) and test it to the "control."

Test headline vs. headline. Test opening paragraph against opening paragraph. Test a webpage against a webpage with a graphic inserted. Etc.

I think what Primo did for you was very nice. It definitely took your site up a few notches.

What I did is take you up another notch. . .graphically (and I didn't use Primo's copy 'cause I was already done with my pimpin' of the website and didn't want to go back.)

http://tinypic.com/view/?pic=t7fqxv
http://i2.tinypic.com/t7fqxv.jpg

Excellent job JayKay!

Terry,
JayKay is absolutely correct when he speaks of testing one element at a time...

- Great advice.

j · 04-07-2006, 02:58 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by jaykay

Hi Terry,

First of all, when you're testing you should only test 1 change at a time. You can't insert a graphic and then make changes changes to the copy (whether in length or actual copy) and test it to the "control."

Test headline vs. headline. Test opening paragraph against opening paragraph. Test a webpage against a webpage with a graphic inserted. Etc.

I think what Primo did for you was very nice. It definitely took your site up a few notches.

What I did is take you up another notch. . .graphically (and I didn't use Primo's copy 'cause I was already done with my pimpin' of the website and didn't want to go back.)

http://tinypic.com/view/?pic=t7fqxv
http://i2.tinypic.com/t7fqxv.jpg

Interesting use of graphical layout.

Why are you always giving your stuff away free?

Your graphical layouts/tune-ups have to be worth
a couple thousand dollars.

JayKays new name -> "The Copy Layout King"

Seems like you have a little niche.

Stephen Davies · 04-07-2006, 03:03 PM

Even though I do a bit of "dabbling" in graphics myself, I know who I'm gonna call if I'm ever in need of any "professional" help.

-and no, I'm not talkin' about my "shrink" here either (in case you're wonderin')

jaykay · 04-07-2006, 05:20 PM

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Originally Posted by j

Why are you always giving your stuff away free?

Obviously my ram chip is lacking a few hundred kilobytes.

Terry Brazil · 04-07-2006, 06:11 PM

Wow JayKay I have to say that is definetally killer. Thanks a million man. But one question. How am I supposed to use it? It is just a screenshot of you ps screen. Can I have the psd file?

I have to say that you guys are great and I really owe you all one. One day I will pay you all back in one way or another. I used to dable in the graphics myself back in the day. Used to hang out on photoshopcontest and worth1000. Didnt have many submissions on worth but had quite a few on photoshopcontest.

Thank you all for giving me your wisdom and time.

Montello Marketing · 04-07-2006, 06:14 PM

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Originally Posted by dominion

Wow JayKay I have to say that is definetally killer. Thanks a million man. But one question. How am I supposed to use it? It is just a screenshot of you ps screen. Can I have the psd file?

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Aaaah, therein lies "the rub." JayKay can now hold that page hostage and release it to you in usable form, for a price!

Terry Brazil · 04-07-2006, 06:34 PM

Yes I see his angle. But unfortunatly enough I am a little on the poor side. Just starting out and only pulling about 100 a week. I am supporting a family of four with that 100 a week and unemployment.

So I really dont have the money to pay the man what he really does deserve even if I wanted to. Im sure you guys have been there afterall Im sure you where not born with all the talent you have.

But I tell you what I would like to get each of your email addresses so I can point some business your way. I have probably recommened about 4 people this way from other forums. Now I just have some people in specific to send them to.

Sorry I dont have no money to pay any of you. But as I said one day I will get you guys back for what you have done for me. You all truely rock and I honored to say that I have got to converse and know people with such talent.

I am sure this will be just the beginning of our relationship as I dont plan on leaving this forum any time soon or ever for that matter. I will make sure to send any of my fellow warriors that are looking for help your way.

jaykay · 04-07-2006, 06:35 PM

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Originally Posted by tvwriterguy

Quote:

Originally Posted by dominion

Wow JayKay I have to say that is definetally killer. Thanks a million man. But one question. How am I supposed to use it? It is just a screenshot of you ps screen. Can I have the psd file?

.

Aaaah, therein lies "the rub." JayKay can now hold that page hostage and release it to you in usable form, for a price!

HAHAhahaha. Well, the price would be a donation to a charity of my choice.

Montello Marketing · 04-07-2006, 07:04 PM

Please choose me as your charity!

Terry Brazil · 04-07-2006, 07:49 PM

That sounds good to me. You choose the charity and I will donate to them as soon a I make some money. I would like to try and split test the two diffrent versions just to see whos sells better. For the fun of it.

I would also appreciate it if you guys could pm me your email addys and what you specialize in. I would be proud to promote such fine copywriters.

At one time I thought that I knew a few things about writing copy but you guys have definetally put me in check. I can only hope to be as good some day.

Thanks for everything
Terry Brazil