I need critiques for my first copy

Alezac · **I need critiques for my first copy -** 07-03-2008, 01:04 AM

Hi! First of all, many thanks for reading this thread.

Below is the link to my first copy:

Sales Copy

All critiques are most welcome.

Thanks again,

Zac

vdmp · **Re: I need critiques for my first copy -** 07-04-2008, 01:18 AM

Hey Zac.

It needs a lot of work. It's just not up to par with even good copy.

The areas that need improvement pretty much run the gamut from basic flow and grammar to addressing your market's hot buttons and having an enticing offer.

This may be a situation where you need to decide do you want to make money or pay the price to get good at copywriting? If it's the former, I'd suggest you find a copywriter you can work with and pay their fee.

I wish you the best and in either case keep writing if you have the passion for it.

Cheers

Alezac · **Re: I need critiques for my first copy -** 07-04-2008, 01:42 AM

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Originally Posted by vdmp

Hey Zac.

It needs a lot of work. It's just not up to par with even good copy.

The areas that need improvement pretty much run the gamut from basic flow and grammar to addressing your market's hot buttons and having an enticing offer.

This may be a situation where you need to decide do you want to make money or pay the price to get good at copywriting? If it's the former, I'd suggest you find a copywriter you can work with and pay their fee.

I wish you the best and in either case keep writing if you have the passion for it.

Cheers

Thanks for the advise. And yes, copywriting is a "magic" and lots of work needs to be done if I need to master this "magic".

I'll continue to learn even though after I've master it one day.

Cheers...