Hello, i have been online for about 6 months and haven't sold anything

please take a look at my sales page for critique. thank you.

Buy Self Esteem Ebook Now - Secrets of Higher Self Esteem and More | Official Site | Nicholas Finnegan

God Nicholas Finnegan... again!

Nicholas... you've been given a ton of great advice over on the warrior forum. You just don't take it.

give me a break man, im trying to go else where to people who wont bash me and the first reply i get in a new forum is a bash. Are you going to finally help me out or not?? cant you see im struggling here??? jesus.

please help, im willing to take any advice. its been difficult for me, cant you see that??

Not a bash at all. I'll say publicly what I said to you privately. Show that you've tried. Show that you've put SOMETHING into this. On the warrior forum you were given a ton of good advice.

You took almost none of it. And what you did take was done in a slap-dash way. If you don't care about making your copy good, why should anyone else?

But that was only part of the story... There was also the drama...

Serious threats of suicide because you didn't make money. You got tons of great advise on that...

You were given specific things to change on your sales letter. Most of those you argued with the copywriters over. When one of us told you to think long and hard about what it is you were trying to sell, you did nothing.

You came back with a new thread claiming you made a whole bunch of changes. I was anxious to see your improvements and was astonished to find the letter was almost the same as it started out.

Someone (not me) finally went so far as to accuse you of abusing the good will of the forum.

What else do you want from us? We tried to help. You appear to know better than us, specs3d1.

of course iv changed my copy, drastically, over and over again. You should see the previous versions. I have about 20 of them, its terrible. Do you want to see them??

I sent you a message privately, please reply and let me know what you want to do, other than that im tired of arguing.

Dude... get a grip.

There's a natural law called "cause and effect".

If you copy sucks, there's a logical reason for it, jumping off the bridge is not the answer.

Maybe one of the reasons is not taking professional advice/feedback.

would you all just stop it!! stop bringing up my past it only makes me feel worse. I came here to get some advice on my sales page. now could i please just get some advice please.

Your website is a usability nightmare, do the exact things in order as I've recommended and then we'll take you seriously.

Your copy is not lookin' good but you can worry about that after you fix the easier stuff. Fix these easy things first and then come back here when you're done. If you don't fix these things don't even worry about posting again, just give up. It means you don't take action and therefore will lose at this game called "Internet Marketing".

1. Kill the right bar and extend the body copy out to the left so it's more readable. I've attached the example.

2. Move your categories that's on the right now, to the left bar. And get rid of the "Ezine Articles" image altogether. I consider the Ezine Articles author logo "ghetto credibility". People see right through it.

3. Get rid of the cloud looking background and go with a light solid blue with a bit of gradient. Or use the color Fortin is using on this forum.

4. Your audio in your video is screwed up. It only plays out of my bass speaker, fix that.

5. Take all your testimonials out of the body of your copy and put them in your left bar and make them look nice/professional. Leave only 1 testimonial in the body copy and that's the dude with the P.H.D. But format it better, it looks terrible the way it looks now.

6. Get rid of the terrible looking download button and replace it with the one I've attached.

7. Get a new header, yours looks very unprofessional. Have one done if you need to and make sure there's a picture of YOUR mug in the header with you smiling. Your the celebrity here, it's time to act like it.

Time to get on your homework.

Listen to ricky...

And you say you've made a bunch of changes... But there's one major change I advised you to make that you have not. And this... along with Ricky's advice might be all you need.

STOP SELLING SELF-ESTEEM. NO ONE IS BUYING IT!

Sell the end result of self-esteem. If you can, stop even mentioning self-esteem.

Nicholas... this advice is separate from the fact that I'm still worried that someone is purporting to help others with self esteem issues while still having so much of a self esteem issue of his own.

Also, I suggested making those changes after only looking at your site for about 3 minutes. There's about 50 other things that need to be done.

But show that you can follow thru and I'll tell you the next steps to take.

Also, Vin ain't lyin' man, I don't know if you're in the right market from the responses I've read from you on this thread, you really might want to re-think your position here.

By the way, EVERYBODY already thinks they have good self-esteem, they think everyone ELSE is the problem...LOL.