Hello! This is my first ad copy. But don't be afraid to rip me apart... I have a pretty strong ego. I appreciate an honest and in-depth opinion!

Online Dating and Attraction Secrets | Guide and Tips To The Best Online Pick Up Method

It's not done finished, obviously... but the raw sales letter is for the most part!

Thanks in advance!

P.S. ...Concerns... I use bolds and capitalization interchangeably. I'm not really sure what the general rule is, here.

I think this sales page is absolutely stunning!! The graphics are great. Sorry i don't know that much about writing copy but i'd thought i'd compliment you so far

dlamont... I recognize the letter you swiped it from.

I wrote it!

Good choice of a swipe. That letter continues to make a bundle.

How YOU Can Attract Beautiful, Sexy Women From The Comfort Of Your Home... All It Takes Is A Computer And An Internet Connection, And You Too Can Use My Proven Online Formula To Meet And Attract Any Woman You Desire...

Google's PPC phrase "online predator" or "online predator handbook/manual" niche is wide open.

Not plagiarized. You would have seen a different reaction from me if that was the case. But just some "lifted and tweaked" phrasing from 1 of my fitness letters.

Yes. I definitely thought the original was genius, Vin! If there are certain elements that are a bit too close to your work, then please inform me. I went through great lengths to make this ad copy my very own and I am well aware that you are an active member on this board.

This ad copy is actually inspired by several different ad copies... I did try to implement a strong story. However, I do fear that the overall ad copy MIGHT be a tad long.

And Mr. Subtle... Do you think that the sub-head is targetting the wrong audience? My product is far from a "Become A Certified Online Predator In 5 Days or Less!" type of thing. Maybe I'm depicting the wrong image from this? Please let me know!

Actually now that I look at it more deeply I recognize rewritten elements of letters from 2 of my fitness clients.

But no... as far as I can see nothing's too close for comfort.

My stuff's swiped all the time. Sometimes stolen, which is another story.

I think the letter's well written.

I just wonder how much longer online dating is going to be a lucrative market. I think people are beginning to realize it's an overrated--profoundly unsatisfying--way of finding love.

All I ever hear from both men and women about online dating is how they've met losers and liars...psychos and stalkers...and other assorted oddballs.

True, but not much different then the bars.