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Default Would You Please Review My Free Trial Websites? - 06-27-2008, 04:26 PM

Would you please do me a favor & review my websites before I roll out to the major CPA networks & start recruiting affiliates?

Please tell me what you like & dislike. They both definitely need to be reworked.

Read What the Makers of Viagra, Cialis and Levitra Hope You Never Discover for a Fraction of the Cost

(targets the male enhancement market)

Don’t Buy Phentermine & Any Diet Pill or Weight-Loss Pill Online Before You Try This Appetite Suppressant Free!

(targets the weight-loss market)

Please Tell me what I definitely need to change & make suggestions if you don't mind.

I'm offering a free 30-day trial of a compound listed in the PDR or Physicians Desk Reference that I can legally sell without a prescription.

It's basically a compound that works like Viagra but also works as a weight-loss stimulant like ephedra but w/o the side effects.

So I had two different websites created that target two different profitable but highly competitive markets.

I have a website that targets the Buy viagra, cialis & levitra markets ...And I have a website that targets the weight loss market such as buy phentermine, diet & weight loss pills market.

Yes, the pill really does work but most such sites all sound the same.
No one else manufactures & markets this potent pill.

Please tell me what I need to change so that I can have the landing pages reworked to produce maximum conversions.

I want my future affiliates to be happy as well as my customers.

If you know anybody that can cost-effectively rework these landing pages to capture attention while generating maximum conversions please let me know.

These landing pages must be short & eye catching as the CPA networks say direct mail sales letter websites don't work for free trial offers such as mine.
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Default Re: Would You Please Review My Free Trial Websites? - 06-27-2008, 05:09 PM

Hello Ascendedmind,

Took a peep. Looks good! You should have a lot of success with both of these. Actually, I wouldn't change a thing. Looks ready for a test.
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Default Re: Would You Please Review My Free Trial Websites? - 06-27-2008, 05:29 PM

Thanks Rachel you are the only positive review I have received.

The CPA networks told me that I needed to move the optin box to upper RH corner to boost conversions.

Did you see the exit pop up?

Did the site look professional or amateurish?



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Took a peep. Looks good! You should have a lot of success with both of these. Actually, I wouldn't change a thing. Looks ready for a test.
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Default Re: Would You Please Review My Free Trial Websites? - 06-28-2008, 11:42 AM

The sites definitely look professional.

I added some suggestions re the copy on the other thread.

I agree with the CPA networks about moving the form to the upper rh corner. Or at least above the fold so they don't have to scroll to find it.


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