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Default Who'd Like An Orange Cause I'm Bored? - 04-08-2005, 10:55 AM

I'M REAL TIRED NOW ... REALLLY!

I am tired of all this me-too rubbish online. Whats up ... has no one got any imagination anymore, urgh.

Page after page looking mind-numbingly the same. Who wants a Ford when you can have a Dodge Cobra, right!

Anyway, my creative madman side has forced me to think more like a prospect and do something new.

THIS IS WHAT I WANT TO SHARE WITH YOU

I put it live at 2:27pm today. At 3:05pm I booked a client for $5,000... zippey, dippey, doooo! Thats the kind of fishing I like.

Now before you do ... I dont care what anyone thinks about my crappy spelling, snotty grammar or choice of colors. SO DONT TELL ME! I dont care!

However ... check it out if ya like spike!

Results tell me what I want to hear

New project is ... www.orangebeetle.com


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Default Bravo, Alan! - 04-08-2005, 11:46 AM

I like it a lot! Of course what really matters is whether it works - and it certainly seems to be working so far.

I have a designer working on something for me, as I have been thinking the same thing: too much "sameness" online.

Keep us updated on how it works, will you?


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Default Re: Who'd Like An Orange Cause I'm Bored? - 04-08-2005, 04:36 PM

Alan,

It's bold, it's bright and by George, it's LAREY!!

I like the bit about certified lunatics - that got a giggle.

Obviously, this won't appeal to everyone, but no one can deny that it's got personality and DEMANDS ATTENTION. It will attract some and repel others - let's hope it attracts the right ones - I'm sure it will.

It's nice to see someone breaking all the "rules" of copywriting - I think it works because the central message is so strong.

Well done!

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Default Re: Who'd Like An Orange Cause I'm Bored? - 04-08-2005, 04:41 PM

ROOLS are for FOOLS...

Break em but ... this is a test and if it fails like a boat with a hole in I will publicy eat my keyboard!


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Default Re: Who'd Like An Orange Cause I'm Bored? - 04-08-2005, 07:36 PM

Not that this is a good sales page, but check out the design
on my past site:

http://www.ebizknowitall.com/makeawebsite.htm

Takes a while to load for people - but it's unique and I loved
it. A friend made it for a video game site (he makes games
for a living now) but he never used it, so I tweaked it and
threw it online.

Yours seems more effective and still unique Alan. Nice job.
Let us know how it goes.

Cheers,
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Default Re: Who'd Like An Orange Cause I'm Bored? - 04-09-2005, 04:10 AM

Alan - I like it. Different. Love the hot buttons across the middle. And it's very ...

orange.

I love the 'floating note' thingie you put up too. Very grabby.


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Default I'll take an orange and the word "grabby"... - 04-09-2005, 11:27 PM

"Grabby" is my favorite word of the week!


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