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Default If you're a copywriter, DO NOT do this! - 11-04-2006, 10:00 AM

Is $30K In 30 Days Possible For You?

This is just plain ugly and crazy. I don't care what anyone says, you'll never change my mind. It's funny, my wife just saw this and said "That's crazy, it just makes me mad looking at it, I could never read that".

I know about message to market match, etc. I don't care. That's just crazy. So, if you're a pro... I'm begging you, stop writing these butt ugly letters.


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Default 11-04-2006, 11:30 AM

Could you be more speciftic? Are you just referring to the outrageous claim in the page title, or the entire "above the fold" part of the page?

I looked at the page and the first thing I saw was a total confusion of header graphics and big bold text. You don't see the real headline until you start scrolling down. I'm sure a good many reading this page will click away.
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Default 11-04-2006, 12:14 PM

I'm sorry I didn't clarify, I'm talking about the above the fold part.

But seriously, some of these fellas gotta clean it up. To me, it just looks crazy. They have like 76 grabbers ABOVE THE FOLD... LOL


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Default 11-04-2006, 12:21 PM

I dunno Ricky you could be right...

Or you could be wrong.


I'm not crazy about it either BUT without knowing the results I wouldn't come down to hard on it.

I know there are a lot of piss-poor looking Internet-sales letter type sites out there making some folks a decent income. Could they be earning more with a better layout and a different approach to writing the copy? Maybe... very maybe.


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Default 11-05-2006, 09:46 PM

All those faces and grabbers are giving me... Double Vision (aaannnd cue Foreigner)
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Default 11-05-2006, 11:30 PM

I wouldn't judge it myself without seeing the stats.

I could care less if it was scribbled on toilet paper. A
salespage is a salespage, is a salespage.

If it converts well, then it's a damn pretty page.

If it's tanking, well all them mugs gotta go!

Something tells me that this page is making some money
though.
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Default 11-06-2006, 08:23 AM

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Originally Posted by Jason Moffatt
Something tells me that this page is making some money
though.
I believe this page has been up for many months, so I'll agree that it's still probably creating some decent profits for someone.
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