Eric and everyone, thanks for your input. I do feel a little intimidated over copywriting and it does not flow as freely as other writing.

I just re-wrote the main body of the copy and know I got more into my own writing when I did it so I hope it comes across better.

The product is unique in its simplicity and effectiveness. I am selling to a real market.

I think I just need to get my copy up to par to get sales on this.